I Can't

Hi there Rene,

Missed the first draft, this revision reads pretty well though.

I do have an issue with "I curl into a fetal ball, an attempt to preserve hope." Pretty much for the same reason as Leanne, it is a tad cliche. Nothing wrong with cliche, it has it's uses. For you though, I feel it's out of place.

Not to tell you how to write your own work, but for some reason, this line popped into my mind as an alternative:

"I congeal, an attempt to preserve hope"

Yes, it sounds weird I know, what else would you expect from The Byte?

Mos.