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Leanne...
Revelling in the rhyming scheme - I guess that dream extension was too inviting to resist (it either telegraphs the internals, or disguises by distracting/protracting; I can't decide which - all in the eye of the beholder perhaps.)
I was tempted to read 'suppositories', but your metrical prowess doesn't really leave that particular avenue of pleasure open to me :>
I wouldn't feel comfortable using 'but' and 'though' in the same line/successive clauses, but that's merely a personal idiot sin (crassly) though.
Last line doesn't have the impact I've been spoiled to  expect from you in delivering an inimitable sardonic swipe [I think it comes down to 'cheat', despite it being the 'natural' rhyming conclusion to that stanza]. [But/though I do like the 'green' [& 'jade'] interplay/implications.
Minor complaints - more than enough colour to lift my mind out of its greyscale configuration and into the clear white reflected light :>


[If, as I suspect, I make no sense, it's because I'm feeling somewhat green...]

by Aphasic on Jul. 8 2008