2- Leanne 
on May 31 2007
I hate it when he says exactly what I want to say.
3- Anstey on June 1 2007
i would say remove both
just 'silver wrappers'
-----
- stephan
4- Anstey on June 1 2007
Love the change. Very sharp.
-----
- stephan
1- Alcuin of York
on May 31 2007
The minimalism of the start is canceled by the "and the silver wrappers". At least eliminate the "the".
Also, consider the possibility of putting the "and" on its own line. Just a thought.
Another item involves a decision: Does the can reflect the sun or the afternoon? If the latter, leave as is. If the former, then you would need to change it to something like "afternoon sun" or "noon sun", etc. It's your choice of what image you want to express.
Actually, this is rather nice - just needs a bit of polishing.
Alcuin