2- Jen 
on May 10 2007
I love the title and what you wrote too.
My only suggestion is that you used the word "bright" twice in the first stanza and close together.
"Bright sun streams down
Makes his cheeks bright"
Maybe:
Bright sun streams down
Makes his cheeks glow
3- Anstey on May 10 2007
this is a lot of fun Shannon.
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- stephan
4- Shannon McEwen on May 10 2007
Jen:
Great suggestion Jen, I didnt realize I'd used the word twice (I hate when I do that!)
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Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
Great suggestion Jen, I didnt realize I'd used the word twice (I hate when I do that!)
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Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
5- Somday In May 
on May 11 2007
This was a really nice read first thing in the morning, after doing battle with my own children to get them on the bus that always seems to run late on the bad days. It made me remember to stop and breath. And then to smile.
Very nicely written, and quite endearing.
~Mandi
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...but what do I know?
6- White_Feather on May 13 2007
Oh, so sweet!!! Absolutely love it. There's nothing like Mother love, and how wonderful it is to see it framed in poetry.
1- Derma Kaput
on May 9 2007
I think what I like best about this poem is in the third stanza, where the child's brown eyes and smile are framed in the rearview mirror. It made me smile when I read it. Very nice Shannon.