Inversion

I

I would capitalize the p in possibility.



IV

this is the 'moment' in the poem i think, and the strongest of the lot. The emotion peaks here and the examination that follows seems a bit of a let down to me. I think the last stanza is also very good, and I'm mixed on whether the titular inversion work or not there.

V

'this day' doesn't really work for me, why not 'today?'

non-being should be hyphenated i think.

VI
We all begin here, in these details.
Mild truths prefer dim shadows
where daydreams are the blisters our
tongues become fraught with.
The hoarse whisper ...

I'm not generally a fan of ending on an elipses, but this didnt' bother me. L2-5 are a bit hard to follow, but I think reasonably clear.

I definitely like what you're doing here.