Rondeau - Shakespeare's Monkeys

Laurie Blumfrom Cloud 9 Associate, 2074 posts	on June 18 2007 This one looks difficult, but I love the lyrical sound of this... I will have to attempt a Rondeau... No promises on content, but I will try to get the form correct!
Deadpoetsmilk	on June 18 2007 The Wandering Minstrel in Post-Modern Mythology Push forward. Keep on trucking. God has given you a gentle nod. The light is green, a magic box throws light upon your metal ox, onto the paths and goldenrod from garden myths. A cherub door is what you’ll find, should you explore the cells that make your body. Sing canary, from your prison wing. Push forward knock down the gates, those holy gates, reclaim the fields, wisps, brooks, and Fates. Arise from toppled tower ruins to kiss a lonely mannequin. Push forward. I definitely didn't stick to the rhyme scheme, that's okay right?
Deadpoetsmilk	inspired from deadpoetsmilk on June 18 2007 Oh dear...in fact after closer examination, I didn't follow any of the form. Whoops...um...help? You'd think I'd wrote enough of these to not make such mistakes.
Leanne Hansonfrom Just west of the lounge room Associate, 3708 posts	on June 19 2007 So... Ryan can't count to two rhymes! I actually quite like yours, and the rentrement idea's there... since Shakespeare and the rest of the English mob couldn't deal with the restrictive rhymes of other European languages and called their sonnets "English", how about you just go with a yankee rondeau? If you can't count the rhymes, the number of lines in each stanza is definitely going to be too hard :P Laurie, don't be put off, they're not really all that hard. When you've got the form done properly once it's almost impossible to muck it up again. Unless you're Ryan
Leanne Hansonfrom Just west of the lounge room Associate, 3708 posts	on June 19 2007 Incidentally Ryan, is it just my imagination or are you actually writing in meter that works these days? It's really good.
Deadpoetsmilk	on June 20 2007 It's just your basic iambic-tetrameter, but that thank you.
Melden Fred Associate, 1848 posts	on June 21 2007 Dang woman! If I should ever fall prey to hubris, all I'd have to do is visit your pages. Not only do you stick faithfully to the convoluted rules, but you make it flow easily - to sound natural. Kudos! Alcuin of Humbleville
Leanne Hansonfrom Just west of the lounge room Associate, 3708 posts	on June 21 2007 Rules are not so hard to follow... this is actually one of the easier forms, provided you get a good line to start with. And I know it's hard to be humble when you're Smurfect in every way.
Colleen Sperry 622 posts	on June 23 2007 I am so new to this.. I haven't ever heard of this form... thanks for the lesson.. and your poem is wonderful...
Deadpoetsmilk	on June 23 2007 Sheol He held a flower to his chest and dreamt of rocking chairs. The rest he needs is having an affair with time. These God-damn birds prepare to wake the morning. His request for silence is declined. No breast to lay his head upon, no guest to gum of life. Does no one care he held a flower? His life’s been long, he would attest to that, to long and short, he’d jest. Perhaps his games of solitaire have reaped this misfortune; a prayer unheard, a life denied, depressed; he held a flower. By Ryan Barrientos Wilbur Okay, since I could not 'follow' directions. This is my new attempt.