2- Shan 
on May 17 2008
haha, did you write thi about my best friend and I?
First, I love it, I always enjoy your poems Jen.
Some suggestions:
- "I can't slide over", how about "I can't even slide over"
- "I thought that you" , how about "I thought that perhaps you"
- "there is a way"; how about "there is always a way"
----- Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
3- Jen 
on May 17 2008
Thanks guys, I appreciate your comments:)
Just a goofy poem for the young and young at heart.
1- Colleen
on May 16 2008
Jen I really enjoyed this... I was really capitivated by the story and the rhyming was so smooth.. I got caught on a few lines.. it could totally be me.. but..here's the ones I had trouble with..
2stanza line 2 "as big a two,"
18stanza line1 "Your all alone".. You're all alone
21stanza line4 "for this tree." ...
well those are so minor I hate to even tell you.. I really enjoyed this Jen, it brightened my day! thank you