2- Jen 
on Jan. 18 2008
Hi Steven,
I like your idea and I'll think about it a bit...Thanks:)
3- Rene' on Jan. 19 2008
I kind of thought;
"Through a puddle
our shoes we'll slosh" in keeping with rest of the stanza!
----- could someone turn the world back over, I'm getting dizzy!
I am orbiting, I don't know where, but I am orbiting something!
1- Anstey
on Jan. 17 2008
For some reason, this line doesn't work for me.
I wanted to read it as:
"Through the puddle where
our shoes kersplosh"