2- Leanne 
on June 4 2007
Jen, voila, I think you've got the rhythm perfect in this one! Silly Harry. Though, I'm wondering what his motivation was for cutting his hair in the first place... a dare? Mightn't hurt to stick in another early verse.
3- Shannon McEwen 
on June 4 2007
The problem with your poems Jen is that they always get stuck in my head! I really like this one!
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Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
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Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
4- Jen on June 5 2007
Thanks for reading and commenting.
This one was a lot of fun to write.
1- Pags
on June 4 2007
*chuckling* This is just the sort of poetry this site needs more of!
A tiny nit - there are two places where I think that a run-on line would add to the humour if you can make them work. - 'Err' could become 'err-or', and the word 'square' at the end of the penultimate line could become 'square-ness-