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I sincerely hope that you receive some sort of cathartic release through your poems. I can feel the tremendous pressure from your words.

I am not yet sure how you feel about critiques or suggestions but here I go once again!   

"I've come to tell you something
There's someone in my mind
There's someone deep inside
Someone you left behind"

You used a contraction in the second line but not the first or third. When I read it out loud, it seemed to help the flow if you use them in all three lines. The rest of the poem has a great beat and the flow is smooth. 

----- just wandering the maze of hallways in my bent mind!

by Rene' on Jan. 6 2008