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In stanza 1, L3, you could lose the 'of' as in 'holes from wence', the mind seems to trip over it a bit. I read it several times to be sure before I made the suggestion. Your rhyme is smooth and muted in quite a few places which made for an interesting read. My only real question comes with the last stanza and the one extremely long line in it. Could you shorten it any without losing your meaning there?

ex; perhaps it's truer truth we know, the likelihood doesn't seem so low -

Just a thought! 

----- just wandering the maze of hallways in my bent mind!

by Rene' on Jan. 5 2008