The Other Women In My Life(finally made up my mind and even changed the title!

Please don't be mad... but I honestly think you've gone too far with this, and it's lost that sparkle.  Now it seems like you're just laying out a list of changes, whereas before you were exploring them in a slightly surreal way.  In the first version, even though it was clear you were talking about yourself then and now, it was still a little ambiguous and personally I find that more poetic but don't take that to mean this is bad, because I know others will like it.