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Just one more obvious spot that I can see -- the punctuation in the first stanza needs addressing, eg:

The glass was full.
Tender emotions,
carefully contained
within the boundaries
of a plastic cylinder. 

The only comparisons I can think to make here are with Plath's writing -- and where she was all woe is me and gosh it's hard, your words are strong and empowering.  Been downtrodden, got new boots, making your own footprints. 

by Leanne on Jan. 3 2008