No Mirror Required

I've sat back and watched this develop, and it's been wonderful -- exactly what I think a workshop ought to be.  Seeing a poet really thinking about her work and being brave enough to consider whether the suggestions fit in with her vision, and then take that further and build something so strong --  well, that makes me believe that poetry might actually have some kind of future after all.  

I only have some very small ideas, because frankly I think this is practically a finished piece and a very fine one at that.  I love the concept, and lines like

"He sees the death
of the only mirror he
has ever used."

This is incredibly empowering for the "mirror", no longer just reflecting what's stuck in front of her but emanating visions of her own choosing.   

In the second stanza, would you consider "slips down her skin" or "slips down her side" rather than "being"?  The combination of being and eating so close together just doesn't work for me, sound-wise, and I'd like to see you pick up that alliteration since you want a slidey noise, and there's nothing better than an "s".  Also, in the third stanza I'm not sure you need to say "deceptive veil" as deception is implied, I think maybe "veil" gives enough information.  Also, getting rid of "deceptive" allows the "l" sounds to win through (gingerly, veil, trembles) without any harsh interruptions. 

Again, thank you for your spirit and care for your poetry.