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Hmmm...beefsteak tomatoes are mostly water, and not nearly as tasty as cherry tomatoes. However, back to the poem.
Interesting metaphor, carried consistently and thoroughly from start to finish. The "sliced" and "bled" in the next-to-last stanza seems rather harsh for the otherwise tender theme, but it does carry emotional impact: It made me feel almost squeamish. The "in which to store" works OK, but I think "that would hold" would work better; the change would eliminate the iambs, but they're not consistent in the piece anyway.
Overall, I enjoyed this. Its images and voice are commonplace and conversational, but the message has heart and depth.
Alcuin
by Alcuin of York on Dec. 13 2007