Cold Fusion

Essentially, the words are good here but they're not creating a mood for me at all.  While you go from shorter, faster lines (which should seem either angry, matter-of-fact or breathless depending on the sounds you use) to slightly longer, more pleading lines after "affairs of the heart" (a badly overused cliche, I'm sorry to say), the contrast is not as clear as it ought to be and I think you're missing a very good opportunity to make the line lengths in particular work for you. 

For example, instead of:

This is his abode
Where his heart resides 

Think about something a bit "punchier", even simpler (you don't need posh stuff in the first part, it's more suited to the second):

This is where
His heart resides

Also, are you absolutely certain you mean "shriven" and not "shrivelled"?

My suggestion is to pare down the language in the first part, make it sparse, then lush it up a bit in the second (though you'll need to do a quick cliche check as well).