Alzheimer's - Shakespeare's Monkeys

Alzheimer's

So I begin by wondering why lines of 18-characters, rather than line breaks related to the text. Is it to manifest the rigidity of an aged mindset? Certainly, it fixes our attention. I agree with Pags on the potential quality of the poem, and also that the ending is a bit weak, but the 18-character line structure is actually quite restrictive. I hate to be the fly in the ointment, but it's "forgetfulness", so your line length needs fixing anyway. Perhaps a comma after that word?

be hope. Age? None
, except forgetful
-ness and tea.

Sorry I can't make more constructive suggestions.

Alcuin