Why I Write

Two things that struck me right off: 1) At the beginning you have "words torturing... visions THAT DANCE...pain burning" It feels more natural to have "visions dancing" as parallel language to the other participles. The "emotions trapped" would remain as is because the verb is used reflexively, unlike the other three phrases.

2) I think the "from inside me" is redundant, and would be universally understood. I don't feel the extra words are needed for the rhythm either.

I like the way you jump into reading. A lot of poets write about why they write, and some about why they read. It's nice the way you show both sides of the process in one piece.

Alcuin