Suburban Sonnet

It looks like you began a sonnet, then decided to forgo rhyme - I assume to give you freedom of expression. I do that often. In fact, I usually don't know what form a poem will take until I've completed the first stanza.

You iambic breaks down in a few places, but I have no solutions that wouldn't damage the meaning. That meaning is deep and valid, and hence I have no suggestions for improvement. You're obviously a very careful editor, and I give you mucho kudos for that (in 2 languages too!). You tell a story here, but also a fact of our human condition in these times. The contrast of young and elderly makes this poem very effective, and including the "I" in it makes it especially effective, contrary to some supposed "exspurts'" opinions.

Alcuin