caress

It's difficult knowing who the one is - God? Ex? Traveling mate? I think leaving it ambiguous makes the poem more interesting, but in some places the mystery is a bit too confusing.

I think the last two lines of S3 should be put at the end of S4. The dance metaphor could be applied differently. Dancing and caressing are quite different motions.

I also think "music's" should be "music". The stanza needs some rewriting anyway, and "music's notes" sounds out with difficulty; and "music notes" is fairly redundant. Perhaps something like, "...my music, floating in the melody..." etc.

I found the piece interesting.

Alcuin