On Chesil Beach

At first I didn't like this, probably because of the seemingly incessant short sentences and phrases, but then I realized your phrases varied a lot, but seemed choppy because of the large number of adjectives. When I read it a second time, I saw the richness of the writing. It's full of clear images and good exposition. The alliteration is obvious, but not overbearing, and when I read it aloud (one of my criteria), it sounded out well. I like this very much, in particular the next-to-last stanza. My least favorite is S3, which sounds a bit like a laundry list, perhaps because the sentence lengths are too nearly equal.

A few suggestions, though I'm certain you've considered at least some of them: S1L3: I think ‘hit' instead of ‘hitting' would work better. L4: "With" sounds ‘off''; perhaps "in" would work better.

Alcuin