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Infinite Monkeys. Infinite Typewriters.
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First stanza: Why are you leaving? How does it get easier? "leaving Second stanza: You used the same word "unliving/unlived" twice and close together. I think you need a different word. I also think you need to explain the unlived expectations. It seems too vague. "unliving expectations Third stanza: Are you crawling to or away from something? What are you hiding from? How and why does it hurt? "first, crawling this actually hurts." Just some suggestions and ideas for you to use or lose:)
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