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I've read this a few times and finally know what's bothering me - the last stanza, though not because of the word "cobbled." "birds dropped" doesn't work for me for two reasons -- one, they don't "drop," and two, it makes me think "bird droppings." I also just can't for my life see birds as "small, dark stones." But that may be a defect on my part. Finally, "the way they came:" I know it refers to H&G, but for a long second I was thinking "they" were the birds, know what I mean? As for the first two stanzas, you've got me. I like the "story telling" tone of it, especially in s2. Looking forward to seeing more!
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