I think of you

I fear Austin may be a teeny bit biased here...

I actually don't mind the dashes -- to weigh in to the punctuation debate -- although I rarely use such devices myself, I think they do help the appearance of the poem on the page.  I would like to see you rethink the term "blood-red passions", purely because it's been used far too many times before.  Also, are you sure you want "prudest"?  "Prude" is really a noun, and a vernacular one at that, so it just seems out of place.  All that said, it's quite a neat little piece but I think it can be lifted further with slightly better word choices.  You only have a short time in such a poem to make an impact -- and even if there are personal and secret meanings behind things, I would suggest making it a little more accessible and dynamic to readers who aren't "in the know".