The house Waits

I'm not sure I agree with Austin specifically, though in principle that's ALWAYS good advice. In this case I don't see the language that might be too much.  Maybe the word seraph is a tad uncommon, I might agree there -- it seems like that's the one stanza where the lexically challenged might suffer most. I am a sucker for pieces about family and nostalgia, so this does hold great appeal.

I am not sure of 'of presence' in the first line, though i see the problem of simply removing it as it is the counter to the expectations.

"static and unchanging" is redundant. in S3 L1

I am not sure the repetition of 'aura' is necessary.

The mood of this piece is excellent, and there's definitely that scent of old people about it.

• stephan