The Narrator Observes his Reader

I do like the poem, but i'm not quite sure i see what you're doing with the stresses. I notice times when you try to start on a stress and others where you end a line on a stress.

What's the pattern you're looking aiming for? I think this does work, for the record. specifically the breaking with the '-ment' which has the double entendre and works well in both ways in that spot.

• stephan