Sophia Casts a Line

Um... you realise this is PERFECT meter? 

And very neat as well.   The embedded rhymes, the wonderful rhythm, it's all very Celtic sounding and... well... rather perfect actually.

Do you mean "read through lines" at all, or are you playing on the hunting/blood idea?  I am intrigued by the notion of communing a crime... and I actually can't think of a single suggestion.