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Dude, you're going to make me read this like a hundred times to figure it out, aren't you?
The first stanza, i thought maybe you were going in a really nonsensical direction, but you aren't at all. I think that first stanza is tight and actually did lead me where i needed to be to suddenly flip over into the second and third. The broken agreement in the verbs seemed slightly reminiscent of early 19th century slave-grammar, almost Twain like, and I found it to be very powerful and evocative of the old Chicago jazz you're so clearly pointing towards throughout.
The rhythm of this also held me firm and referred back to the offbeat of good jazz, whilst holding on to a poetic lyric that flowed well upon reading aloud.
Now, as far as meaning, I think i might need some help, and further readings.
The first stanza, i thought maybe you were going in a really nonsensical direction, but you aren't at all. I think that first stanza is tight and actually did lead me where i needed to be to suddenly flip over into the second and third. The broken agreement in the verbs seemed slightly reminiscent of early 19th century slave-grammar, almost Twain like, and I found it to be very powerful and evocative of the old Chicago jazz you're so clearly pointing towards throughout.
The rhythm of this also held me firm and referred back to the offbeat of good jazz, whilst holding on to a poetic lyric that flowed well upon reading aloud.
Now, as far as meaning, I think i might need some help, and further readings.
- stephan
by Anstey on Feb. 10 2007