turned cheek

I'm going to add my two cents about S3, because its execution is vital to the poem. Your first two stanzas are very well set up, so I think the key to getting this one right is S3. I think the repetition of "a single kiss from you" is superfluous and I don't really see where it helps you rhythmically either. I say just axe that line and the stanza works better. look at the syllabic use.

8
3
3
4
6
2
1
1


it's working almost like an evens countdown 8, 3+3, 4 but then 6 again. For me it kind of disrupted the momentum.