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Infinite Monkeys. Infinite Typewriters.
More in turned cheek turned cheek
Tis actually pretty damned sweet. And not the sugary teeth hurting kind. More like apple in a really good curry. You've used rhyme so well in the first couple of stanzas that I really notice the lack in the third and I'm not sure that's a good thing. Although you alter the form of that third stanza, I would really suggest a rhyme between the first two lines, even if you're not going to continue that 3rd line rhyme. Having the rhyme right the way down the bottom (such/much) just doesn't seem to pack that velvet punch, I'm afraid. You could leave it there, of course, but I'd still suggest sticking in another earlier on. In fact, I'd really prefer to see that 3rd line rhyme continued, even in near rhyme, on reflection. The third stanza, though it's clearly supposed to be "far far too much" is just not sitting well with my senses.
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