Ode to a Man on a Harley

I dislike the first three lines, though, i do see the point of setting a tone, and i'm not sure that removal would be wise.

That said, "Shall I wrap my thighs" is a much stronger opening line.

I don't like the hyphens (m-dashes?) around tight, nor do I think the question mark should be there, but instead at the end of that stanza. Really it's one complete thought, I think.

I think black-ribboned is hyphenated.

I very much like this piece, though, I consistently question the dashes throughout. It's good, very good.

• stephan