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DId he have a tattoo? (nosy me) The only stanza I'm not wild about is the opening. I wonder if you could cut it out completely, given that the title sets the reader up for what's about to happen. I really like the first stanza and love the second one; you're really giving the reader the feel of what it's like to ride with this biker dude. I am wondering if the second stanza should end with a question mark. The "myself, machine and man" stanza, wow, I see it as fields of sunflowers and it's a marvelous image. I'm not so sure about the first two lines of the last stanza but I don't know why. It feels a bit awkward, like the order of the words is off. I'm sorry I'm not more articulate as Leanne and Alcuin are in their feedback. I'm just telling you how I feel it. I like the blended beads of sweat and love the hyphenated words, which to me denote rises in the rode. Cool, bay-bay.
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