Lost and found

Shan... I have to agree.  Your language is inconsistent and it just doesn't flow smoothly from one idea to the next.  HOWEVER, instead of just hitting delete, have you considered turning this into a series of haiku?  Take the ideas and the basic words and twist them a little -- and in a haiku series it's not going to matter if you're introducing a few different thoughts, because technically you've got different poems.