amends

How you suffer! But the poetry is as sharp as the shards of glass described. Leanne's right. The angst of the poem is not matched by the pun of the title. May I suggest "Untempered".
The one area that is only OK - that detracts from the writing is "I do break". Given the tightness of the writing, the beat-marking "do" sticks out like me at a nudist convention. Hoever, I'm not sure of a better substitute.
Alcuin