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Well, S1’s pattern is n1-v1-n2 / v1-v2-n3 / v2-v3-n2 / v3-...n3
we should expect a complete startover or a continuation in S2. You begin with a startover: n1-v4-n2 / v4-(“just”)-n3 / (“just”)-N3-n2 etc
So here is where the pattern breaks down. Adding probably won’t correct this. The “just substitutes for another verb because you begin the next line with it, so it’s functionally consistent. The middle word “hose” in L3 must be repeated as the first world of L4. Then S3 needs to be modified to have the same structure.
I don’t think it’s a bad structure, and it’s not that difficult. I suggest you make a list of all the words that rhyme with “hose”. Don’t forget the homonyms spelled differently (“clothes”, “woes”, etc.). The list will probably spur some free-wheeling, free-basing, free-association, and half the poem might just write itself for you.
Alcuin
(ps: if it doesn’t work, I'd get my money back on the drugs) (ps-ps: once you get this one done, you can do one on Fartin' Martin)
we should expect a complete startover or a continuation in S2. You begin with a startover: n1-v4-n2 / v4-(“just”)-n3 / (“just”)-N3-n2 etc
So here is where the pattern breaks down. Adding probably won’t correct this. The “just substitutes for another verb because you begin the next line with it, so it’s functionally consistent. The middle word “hose” in L3 must be repeated as the first world of L4. Then S3 needs to be modified to have the same structure.
I don’t think it’s a bad structure, and it’s not that difficult. I suggest you make a list of all the words that rhyme with “hose”. Don’t forget the homonyms spelled differently (“clothes”, “woes”, etc.). The list will probably spur some free-wheeling, free-basing, free-association, and half the poem might just write itself for you.
Alcuin
(ps: if it doesn’t work, I'd get my money back on the drugs) (ps-ps: once you get this one done, you can do one on Fartin' Martin)
by Alcuin of York on May 29 2007