002 Bad Poetry

I see I need a proof reader! Odd how one can read and work on a piece and in the end simply fail to see the typos. So thank you all of you for fulfilling that role, and of course for reading.

Regarding formal and informal language, I think that discussion would be worthy of a whole new thread! I think (but may be wrong) that I vary the formality of how I speak even to a child. Moments of closeness merit close, informal, even personal family language. Moments like this of anger and 'telling off' are about distancing so I would tend to use the child's Sunday name (Philip rather than Phil for instance) and more formal language... In this particular instance I liked the repeated hard emphasis (punch?) of  "You will not" whatever. But what do other readers think?