Pinch Me

Stanza one... I can imagine taking out "the" to me it sounds stronger without it.

Stanza two... I am not sure about "vague" I rock back and forth about it.  And I am reading this this morning when earlierI looked at my husband still snoozing, and I thought I have never seen a grown man look more like a happy baby asleep. Somehow it is the same experience...but it did not seem vague... he looked like he knew it...but maybe he didn'tbut I sure did...

Stanza three..is perfect

Stanza four... I wonder if the end could be "I wonder/if I'm dreaming... but maybe the abrupt "Could" is like waking up..and could be good for that reason... in some ways I like the understated "I wonder if I'm dreaming" which sneaks up without notice...

but all in all--a beautiful poem. The I and you of each stanza is so appropriate...  after the first sets the natural scene.

The line counts feel right to me...the shorter first, and the longer last...which asks the question...(we all know the lovely answer...)