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It should be "your" father,not "you" father. I love that line by the way, being a parent and hearing myself say that a time or two before.
I love the idea that poetry is in the naughty corner like an errant child.
One thing that I didn't like as much was the formality of some of the lines. WHen speaking to a child I would maybe puncuate some points, but maybe having some words more informal like "don't" instead of "do not"
Overall I like the poem and the concept.
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Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
I love the idea that poetry is in the naughty corner like an errant child.
One thing that I didn't like as much was the formality of some of the lines. WHen speaking to a child I would maybe puncuate some points, but maybe having some words more informal like "don't" instead of "do not"
Overall I like the poem and the concept.
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Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
by Shannon McEwen on May 20 2007