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The mist it did spread.Looking at this stanza(or are these technically 'pages?'), there are a few things that bugged me.
From the pot it did rise.
Swirling and whirling
Into the green moonlight skies.
- The inverted order in lines 1 & 2. The first of the inversions is easy to fix, but the next one might be a bit tricky to maintain the rhyme.
- wouldn't it be 'moonlit' not 'moonlight?'
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- stephan
by Anstey on May 10 2007