Splitting

Many thanks for the comments, Stephan. Yes, I wondered if the various pronouns might confuse the reader here.

Basically it's one couple (the "me" and "you") contemplating the split up of another couple (the "he" and "she"  referred to as "they" at l5) .

As for the phrasing and lineation, this is a sonnet (or posing as one!)...so I try and approximate to iambic pentameter and a Shakespearean rhyme scheme (using enjambment in the sestet).

As ever a hit and miss affair...good to see some activity on the site again...BRgds., Alan.