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Having taken Leanne's suggestions on board...
Yeh -- 'through' is surplus.
The 'anonymity' thing -- pause for thought -- how do you read the subject/predicate in your variation? My modification is unsatisfactory; 'proscribed' could be applied with equal invalidity. Originally, anonymity was sliced, resulting in a subliminal  recognition of 'variations', despite identification with 'theme'.
Yes, I've used compounds, though sparingly. I like the idea, but the shred/crush/pack synthesis sounds unwieldy to me, though I could get used to it -- a compromise while I acclimatize to the sonics.
Pleading the fifth -- yes, horribly clichéd; unfortunately, it conveyed the precise meaning i wanted in the context. But me? Unsubtle? Well, that's just bollocks. That whole segment is unsubtle I guess -- that part obviously requires a rewrite. A temporary dressing applied; I'm aiming for something less semantically explicit :>)
Pregnant -- quite right, overused, though I can't remember the last time I used the word, when writing, if ever. Gravid is fine for now, until my search delivers fruitful synonymity. 'Pregnant' was the ideal -- a term that nurtured the misconception of personal control. I imagined the narrator as subject to interminable gestation, albeit on a voluntary basis. A mess of a mother/child dichotomy
Thanks Leanne -- I'm tempted to start drinking, so that all will make perfect sense :>)

[Does the 'history' thing work?]

by Laura doom on June 19 2009