Smooth Lines

Hi rws

Love the opening salvo - infatuation, awe, almost worshipful. The conclusion seems to wane somewhat, particularly 'them, they, they' in the final stanza. I know it's meant to be informal, but the dry humour is somewhat blunted (?)

I played with it - hope you don't mind.
This may not be any better, but I think it's sharper (poor deluded me

Every vehicle I've owned
Displayed lines in the vein
Of a lady I know

When comfort set it
I tired of them
As she did of me

I may have misread it completely, so apologies in advance :>