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Oh, I wish you could have heard the sound that came out of my mouth while reading that last stanza. The deep mama "OH!" exhalation of oh, my God, what a blessed moment.
In the first stanza or so I was a wee bit confused about where the imagery was going, so I'm wondering if you should put something more like the wilted sandwich -- something more individual and personal? -- in the first stanza.
Of course, I'm tired as hell and might be talking out of me arse. But that's the way I sees it at one a.m.
In the first stanza or so I was a wee bit confused about where the imagery was going, so I'm wondering if you should put something more like the wilted sandwich -- something more individual and personal? -- in the first stanza.
Of course, I'm tired as hell and might be talking out of me arse. But that's the way I sees it at one a.m.
by Tracey on Apr. 23 2007