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I like this idea, but I think you got a ways to go on this one Mos. FIrst of all, the end is great. Love that idea/line. I like the parts throughout where you have a near repetition with a twist. the amoral/moral -- means/demeans. I don't like the words/words though, and at other places, you don't carry the pattern and it felt wrong. Honestly, this was the type of poem where I think i'd like to see a more consistent line, even to the point of making this perfectly metric. It would add a sort of emphasis which, I think is missing.
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