Stained-Glass

Jen, this has an excellent mood and is well written -- one instant fix is needed in L2 of the last stanza, gather just doesn't fit the meter.  I'd suggest "the shadows flock to dwell".  Also, into in the last line is not quite grammatically correct, they can't be dwelling into, it really needs to be just in, which would mean a two-syllable adjective is needed before stained-glass "in SOMETHING stained-glass hell" because otherwise your meter's going to be shot.  I will go through this more thoroughly after breakfast but on first read it's really quite impressive.