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Cute! This type of poetry always appeals to me and I enjoyed reading your poem:) A few suggestions, in your first line "were" should be changed to "was". Here's your syllable pattern per line: 9-5-6-6 7-5-6-6. Here's my revision: I wish I was a dandelion 9 See me dancing past the golden sun 9 Also, you could work on the meter of your poem, (stressed and unstressed syllables), which I didn't focus on in my revision. I like your rhyme pattern of abcb efgf:)
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