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Needs work, dude: Repetition of ‘winter'; S2 ends w/2 short sentences, sound stilted; Ditto S3L4; etc.
Some may think the ‘past existence' stuff is a bit whacko. I do not. I think the typical portrayal is incorrect, but I definitely believe that something associated with the "I" continues after the "I" ends; and that it reassociates itself with another "I" at a later time.
I think the short sentences give this an eerie, dream-like feel, but I think they need to be redone; perhaps turned to incomplete sentences.
Alcuin
by Alcuin of York on May 1 2008