Madrigal Misery Tour

OK, I'm kind of reluctant to completely perfect the dactyls here so I'm going to plead the Hopkins and say it's sprung -- because it seems quite ok despite the odd syllable counts in places, with the slight alterations shifting the speed of the reading and working in your favour.  So yeah, claim it's an Anglo-Saxon derivative, that's my suggestion.  I have tidied a couple of little stress issues but they're very small alterations.  

Everyone knew it was all in her head,
Demands for attention, the claims of disgrace,
Til yesterday gave her a slap in the face.

The devil appeared in the detail she read
She froze in the heat of his horny embrace,
Though everyone said it was all in her head
when attention was drawn to the claims of disgrace.

With yesterday's child safely tucked up in bed
countless lovers are lost in that nebulous place *
where the ends of the earth meet impersonal space.
As records will show, it was all in her head,
Demands for attention, the claims of disgrace.
What she needs is a clinical slap in the face.†

• -- this line is just eew really, "countless lovers" has to be rushed rather unforgivably and nebulous is just... nebulously nowt.  Really, this is the one in the whole piece that needs a serious rethink.

† It's not so awful as is, but it's a bit longish -- what about "she could do with a clinical slap in the face"?