Ode to Displacement

Much as I love the sapphic stanzas, and the interesting appearance of sister sappho herself doing a near cameo, I really do get kind of lost in this. There's a whole lot of personification going on, perhaps a bit too much. Every stanza but one begins with a personified concept follow by a present tense verb - it starts feeling formulaic in a hurry. I don't know. I must be a really picky bastard. Personally, I'd love to see "phallusy" spelled out in this, and more overtly playful stuff actively working to deconstruct everything else. But let me repeat: I don't know. I need to contemplate the title and read this some more. I have a feeling I'm missing stuff but my brain is too insubstantial today to even begin picking up on nuances. This could be brilliant and I'd completely miss it. Meaning I woke up this morning and discovered I was dumb as a brick. How do these things happen? I should stop wasting your time. I'll be back, but not until I can think clearly.