Tale of The Villagers of Light

This seems, to me, to be more of an outline of a story. You need, i think, to flesh this out quite a bit. Possibly focus on key characters. Add dialog. Break out sequences to highlight the importance of the points. The use of poetry to elaborate on the general cultures and philosophies would probably also be excellent. There's something here, but it's more of a kernel at this point.

I do think you have to be very wary of cliche. Obviously this genre is done to death, and that makes it hard to do things that have never been done. It's also hard to do something better than anyone else has ever done it.

Therefore your best bet is to act as the voice for the particular ideas and sensibilities that you personally bring to the themes you're covering.  

Personally, I think the detached-ness - the generic titles and such - of your chosen point of view detracts a bit from what could otherwise be a fairly passionate sort of story. This is why I'd suggest personalizing it with archtypal characters that the reader can relate to.  

I am not sure that the strongly labelled really appeals to me as a reader.